The Programmers Lamment (by sarah)
I want feed back on this poem - I'm not sure how to set it out for a start - I was supposed to be writing in two line stanzers - free verse but I dont really under stand what that means so I gave up with the formal structure and wrote what came into my head - warning it does sort of contain a swear - not my fult blame the programmers.
Would lovew feed back - be harsh
Tap, tap, tapping away, Fingers flying, strange graceful dance
Notice not as light fades, consume all energies, forking demons, spawned zombi child
Dance logic, time
Tap tap tapping away, polish finger tips over letters worn
Hunger burns, Sandwitch forgotten, cat licked, stale,
Animalistic, persuing prey, Python here, Chicken there
tap tap tapping, wrist support frayed, mundane treasures, Ruby, Perl
Water sits, bubble strewn, littering your domain
Intently stare, bugs annialated, or so you prey
tap tap tapping, spinning ball, shift to corner, back again
3 am, time for sleep, red eye raw
cup of coffee, jar of beans
headaching, back stooped, so much to sort, so much to do
tap tap tapping. between the sheets, misty bruised dawn, comes and creeps
Power low, reserves giving out, drowsy talk, lisp, dialected, scheme
thought process hard, more tests more
Leached knowledge, sleep, dream, Brainfuck, But still keen